A Mouse in the Wall
May 7, 2024
Up on a hill was a house and in a wall was a mouse. The house was abandoned. That little mouse made the walls its home. The mouse was alone one day. A man came, he was a builder. He had come to knock down the mouse’s home. A girl saw the mouse and made her her pet. The mouse was named Fifi. Fifi was having so much fun. Soon the girl saw the mouse was getting fatter. Soon after, the person went to feed Fifi and saw that Fifi had some babies. She sold the babies and became rich.
Hi Pippa,
What a sensational beginning to your story! Not only did you successfully use the technique of the week (beginning with a “Where Things Are” sentence), but you created a lovely sense of rhythm as well! Your use of punctuation was very skilled. Keep on writing!
Love it! Well done Pip x